I believe in Independence.
I believe in independence. My inspiration throughout my life has always been my mother. my mother came from a small town in Scranton, PA. She grew up in a large family where a college education was vastly more typical in the male gender. However, her father always taught her that any amount of success can be achieved if so desired. Taken from that was a strong passion for one day working in New York City. At the young age of twenty-three, Debra Ann Graham traveled to NYC to seek employment. Seeking job opportunities became more difficult as doors remained closed. She was told that she did not have proper job experience. Finding work became her obsession. Finally, at the age of twenty-five she began her career in cosmetics.
This story shaped my beliefs by making me realize that being independent and taking responsibility for yourself are the most important traits a person can behold. My mother shows great example of those traits. Everything she does, she does for her family, and most of all for herself.
In conclusion, my mother now lives a happy life. She lives without worry that if something crucial and upsetting should happen...she would survive.
Your essay was really amazing! I think the example of your mom was really good, how she went from unemployed to the vice-president of Lancome. I think it shows that hard work and determination can get you anywhere in life.
ReplyDeleteI like how you incorporated your mom. She seems like she is almost your idol. That is truly an amazing story how she was a great idol for independence. Nice job
ReplyDeleteThank you both.
ReplyDeleteNice, Alessandra. Your mom is a great example of strength and independence. She is very smart and has worked really hard. You are a lucky girl.
ReplyDelete3/5 points. There are some basic technical errors here. Please capitalize every first word in a sentence.You also change tense throughout the piece. Choose one and stick with it.